I’m editing the text because, obviously, I think it could do with editing. But, let’s not forget there’s a whole slew of great content in there which I’m leaving alone, and which is effectively Rae Carson doing to the movie what I’m doing to her book. For instance, I love this addition to the otherwise completely forgettable Sinking Sands moment:
Rey had just enough time to register that the sand around her was a different colour – more black than ochre – and that she’d seen this kind of sand before…
She sank up to her hips.
Her friends were sinking around her, especially Poe.
“… the hell is this?” he said, trying to extricate himself, but his movement only made him sink faster.
“Sinking fields!” Rey said.
The Sinking Fields of Jakku had taken many an unwary soul. She should have recognized the sand right away.
“Grab onto something!”
But there was nothing to grab onto.
(A few paragraphs later)
Tears filled her eyes as she thrashed against the sand. Rey was going to lose them all. Not to a dark and powerful enemy, but to a natural phenomenon she should have recognized. Jakku was going to have its last word after all.
Every now and again there’s something like that in the book which makes me stop and go “Wow. She was trying to fix this story too, and she largely succeeded.”