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Post #1410098

Author
CaptainFaraday
Parent topic
The Rise of Skywalker Expanded Edition by Rae Carson: The Faraday Edit (WIP)
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Date created
13-Feb-2021, 4:42 AM

Third chapter:

https://pastebin.com/yR7LjhL3
Password: CaptainFaraday

Changelog:

  • I rolled together different parts of a few chapters to fix the pacing issues created by removing lightspeed skipping. Unfortunately, I didn’t write it down as I was going, and now I have forgotten exactly what came from where. Oh dear.
  • Removed lightspeed skipping.
  • Removed Klaud.
  • Made the asteroid an abandoned mine, rather than an active First Order mine.
  • Removed the chess game so I can potentially use it somewhere later.
  • General quality of life edits as previously described, continued condensing bit characters in the Resistance into a smaller number of characters who each get a bit more pagetime.
  • Removed the implication that Boolio retrieved the information himself, instead of just passing it along.
  • The information being retrieved is now a copy of Palpatine’s transmission to the First Order.