My only issue is that the Eye requires introduction, which takes time and reader investment, and then never shows up again. I left the stuff with Hux and Pryde because they’re both characters throughout the film, and their scene helps introduce us to both of them, to Kylo, to the First Order and its structure and attitude, to where the plot is headed, and sets up the dynamics of all three characters in relation to each other. The Eye just sets up, well, the Eye, and I think having Kylo talk to a mysterious ancient thing he doesn’t fully understand treads on the toes of Kylo talking to Palpatine.
I agree that it’s the same problem the movie had, I think that’s just inevitable in some ways because of what we’re working with. If I can introduce the Eye in a very fast but natural way, and keep the conversation brief, then I agree about keeping it in and adding the other Kylo stuff we talked about. You’ve made me determined to accomplish it now.