Delpheas said:
Blatant disobedience because she thinks she knows best is absolutely one of them.
Yep, agree, I think I’ll just emphasise that she’s on thin ice, then this cool scene can be the thing that tips her behaviour into needing discipline.
Maybe make it a cold open? That could help with the pacing.
Worth looking into for sure, it makes a better cold open than the one I used in The 501st.
That actually reminds me, do you have any thoughts for making it appear Ahsoka has, even only briefly, some PTSD thanks to dying on Mortis?
I have a real problem with Mortis, I was going to exclude it altogether until convinced otherwise by contributors of this thread. I’m instead going to recontextualise it into essentially an extended force vision, where those characters aren’t the literal representations of light, dark and balance (too demystifying), so nothing that happens there will be literal. I’ll have her die, in the vision, and Anakin do something something lightside to preserve her, in the vision, which’ll still have the effect of tying her to Morai. But I really don’t want anything in that arc to be explicit, so I shouldn’t expect to need to give her PTSD.
Another thing is, I just realised Padme doesn’t appear in your S1. That’s something that bothers me from the perspective of her being one of the four main characters of TCW, and one of three of the PT.
She’s a main character in TCW, but she’s not a main character in TCW:R, mainly because she has no arc across the show, and unfortunately doesn’t have many great episodes. Her decent episodes and appearances will be preserved and highlighted as much as possible, but ultimately TCW did her a disservice and I don’t want TCW:R to strain itself to make her a feature at the cost of overall quality.
And the finally, an Ahsoka question. Will you be trimming/removing the Ahsoka/Lux flirting?
I’m not sure yet, I haven’t thought much about this. Originally I didn’t like it so much, but contributors here highlighted that it serves he quite well by the end because it shows that unlike Anakin she does have the capacity to let go. I’ll keep it in mind as I progress.
Sorry, I know my thoughts jump around from one place to another…
Not at all, this is perfect! I really do want everyone’s thoughts on any topic, even if it’s something that’s already been discussed to death, or a conversation we’ve moved on from. It’s always valuable.
(Once again wishing that the final Cad Bane and Ventress arcs had been fully produced…)
Here’s hoping the Bad Batch adapts a few of those lost plotlines…