Second chapter:

Changelog:

Same general quality-of-life edits as Chapter 1.
Cut chunks of big print where characters would pause to remember previous events as miniature flashbacks, awkwardly pausing the current events.
The Force and meditation are now described in an almost Zen Buddhist sense, to highlight the inner-peace-versus-inner-conflict aspect of Rey’s character arc and tie it to her attempts to communicate with Force Ghosts.
Removed Rey’s Force vision at the beginning. Her character arc already has enough propelling it without the visions, and its frequent mentions don’t add anything new or insightful.
The Skywalker saber remains broken in two. Rey now uses Luke’s green lightsaber, which is unfamiliar to her, and ties better into her uncomfortableness accepting it and why she continually returns it to Leia.
Changed the planet’s name from “Ajan Kloss” to “Ajan Koss.” It might be nitpicky, but to me “Ajan Kloss” sounds like something a dental hygienist would use, not a Star Wars planet.
Changed Rey’s “Be with me” line, to set up a different one-liner at the climax.

I think that’s it for the major changes to this chapter. I let my changelog get a bit disorganised, but I’m tidying it up.