Good job. Some interesting choices in your version. You restored a few bits of the original dialogue, not unlike me, but in different places. An interesting blend of the original, MF's titles, my titles, and what appears to be some of your own ideas too. That's what I like most of all.

"Come on, I did lead you here." I like the way this particular line was handled. I can't even remember, was this an original line, or was this out of the head of HAL9000? Well handled in either case. This is one difference from both MF's and my versions that I unquestionably like better. I may re-mux the disc and add your subtitles in as an option as well. Might even crib some of your ideas for an update to my version. No time soon, but I'll hang onto this file for the next round.

By the way, there are some upper-case "I"s that got changed to lower case "L"s in my OCR process. Take a critical comb-through as I saw some stragglers in there. Sorry about that.

One more thing, you may want to add in an opening subtitle like in mine, that claims credit for the stream and, if necessary, tells where the other streams are.

Good job!