I don’t think the line “Ben, come home” ever got to the place of sounding totally natural. I’m open to it but it’s not something I’ve clamored for.
That’s pretty nice, Cinefy! I do think that it’s better to go subtle, so you’re right that I will leave it as you got it prior.
I got some feedback from a few layman friends who agreed that the castle and forest shots feel natural and make for an improved opening.