The blue text mentions Rex “patrolling” facilities, but shouldn’t it be “inspecting”?
I kind of wanted to imply he was broadly keeping an eye on everything (for at least a couple of weeks or more) in the whole area Grievous was last seen in. Do you reckon this doesn’t quite work?
I feel the “Two weeks later” could use a second or two more black screen before the visuals of the next scene start. Also perhaps surge of music just before this (as we focus on Hevy’s face) to further the idea that 99’s words have landed.
Agreed. I’m quickly learning that major transitions are often accompanied by musical swells, which is obviously not easy to produce since they’re not naturally there. But I’ll see what I can do to enhance the music in these areas. At least McFibb’s intro and outro will solve that for the major transitions.
Other than that I was very pleased with everything - it felt contained and better than the three original episodes
Super!