So i finished you edit. It definitely works better than the original. That’s for sure. so great work narrative wise. The new dialogue for daenys speech at the red keep, great idea! As the integration of the jamie, brian and sam dead at the funeral. I don’t recall but did you showed that they were pushed against the wall at the last battle inside of winterfell?

But as you’d to work with the **** source material i’ve seen some problems:

ep05 weird as jamie says he made a promise to fight for the living, but actually never did or missed i something?
out of nowhere cersei believes the story about the dead as well as jamie and any other? problematic, dragonpit could’ve worked for that
dragons are a problem. from ep05 onwards we never see all 3 together (excluded beyond the wall), mostly only one. it’s just odd
daenerys rough look feels out of place after being attacked by euron. just a lost battle, why would she get dragged down by this so much? I like your idea of having missandei alive and it really works. Just not the scene of fucked up daenrys.
i also like the idea daeny leaving with john to the north beyond the (partially) wall, but the scene where she supposedly is flying over him and looking back as she passes him didn’t work.

please don’t get me wrong, you did the best you could with the material given, so it’s not your fault.

technically unfortunately i’d got a lot of compression artifacts in dark scenes. but you’d have to made a compromise. i get that.