Yeah, I’ll hunt around a little more then. Someone must say it in a soft tone.

I’ll also look out for something for Hevy to say as he triggers the explosion. I cut out his “Do we take prisoners?” “I don’t”, because it’s a clumsy exchange, but I’d like him to say something like “99”, “Domino Squad”, or “Brothers”.

I could cut “Goodbye 99” and switch in desertion, I’ll give that a shot. Desertion is the stronger scene. One thing I won’t include is Hevy coming back and saying “I’m back with the squad”, because it’s way too heroic for the tone we’re after.

Agreed on Echo and Fives’ slow ending with Shaak Ti being a bit off. I left it this way since I’m still cutting down from all of the available sources, but I had thought it might work as a deliberately awkward moment, as if she’s just given them the cold shoulder. I’ll trim it though.

Right, I should realistically have a review cut out in a couple of hours. (Edit: Uploading is being a hassle, but it’s on its way.)