Thanks Kalee. Glad you thought it was smooth, I picked up some new techniques for audio editing in this episode, which both lets me create nice transitions and gives me a good tool to use if I get a bit stuck in future.

Did you feel like the ending was conclusive? Like it was obvious they’d failed, and that they were getting shipped out, but maybe not as soldiers? I can’t imagine a more explicit edit of the available material, but I’d like to know if it at least feels up to a good standard.

Agreed on the final test, I’m sure I can fit a spare establishing shot in there.

Regarding Hevy’s attempted desertion, I think the only options for where to put it after the second test would pose problems. If it comes right after the second failiure, it interrupts Bric and Ellis talking about the failiure, which I think would make the fail less explicit. And if it goes after that, it would need to flow directly into ‘goodbye 99’, which has different lighting. So I think it has to go before.

You’re right though that it’s a slightly hopeful scene, it almost goes too far in setting up Hevy’s return as the magical turning point which’ll fix Domino Squad. I don’t know if I can take any of that away without losing the lovely 99 stuff.