OK, since I think my Clone Cadets part will need a bit of community refinement, I’m going to post it here.

It’s probably worth you knowing that the (basically final) Rookies and ARC Troopers segments play for a combined 37 minutes excluding credits.

Here’s version 1, which is the one-attempt version (9 min 30 sec), which goes:
Issues > Failed Test (combined from original tests #1 and #2) > Wrap-up
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YbrurWwbZXIDgEJ7ceiyYyPuEY10B9cp/view?usp=sharing
This one is shorter, and could possibly become a pre-credits opening, which would allow me to use the intro text to be explicit that their failiure has sent them to the Rishi moon listening post. Doing this will help transition between the two parts, though there are still a lot of scenes here so it may feel too much of a wait until the opening credits. If the opening credits come first, I can mention that Domino have just failed their final practice test, though I do kind of feel like this one feels a bit off without seeing the initial failiure, as MikeReese suggested.

Here’s version 2, which is the two-attempt version (11 min 30 sec), which goes:
Failed Practice > Issues > Failed Final Test > Wrap-up
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1IhVOlEBd-gFoW3nn8bk_Mcy-3rvH4D67/view?usp=sharing
This one is longer, and at 11:30 is probably too long to lead into the credits, so it’s probably right this comes after the credits and straight into ‘two weeks later’. I might put ‘2WL’ over black, but I also might just put it on blue text over the establishing shot from Rookies. This one is more dependent on the opening making it explicit that the cost of failiure is maintenance or listening posts.

In both cases, the Issues and Wrap-up sections are the same.

Issues goes:
Domino are told off by Bric > Fives and Echo (though we don’t really know it’s him) ask Shaak Ti for reassignment > Shaak Ti and Lama Su talk about stretching DNA > Hevy is convinced to stay by 99
I think this works OK. I’ve trimmed all scenes a little to make them a bit more implicitly saying “Domino Squad suck”.

Wrap-up goes:
“That’s an automatic fail” > Bric and Ellis complain (recontextualised to be more explicit discussion of failiure) > Brief shot of clones loading onto ships > Hevy says goodbye to 99
(The very next scene however I cut it will be ‘Two Weeks Later’ and scenes on the Rishi moon where they’re complaining about being bored.)
I think this works well. Obviously there’s nothing explicit to say their failiure is final, so I’ve tweaked these scenes to try to make them land as hammering home the failiure more.

I’m interested in feedback on:

The versions - which one feels best?
The positioning of the opening credits relative to the Clone Cadets part of this arc? Before (cold open the intro text) or after (intro text then clone cadets then ‘two weeks later’?
Any issues with any of these scenes?
Any issues with the flow between scenes?

Bear in mind that this is still rough, so many scenes could do with refinement or trims. When I’m editing, I always produce the full-fat maximum-content version first, then cut it down from there. Though please still feel free to nitpick from here, it’ll help direct my focus.

(It’s no extra work for me to now turn this into two versions of the full episode, so I’m going to produce both versions as full episode review cuts as I gather feedback)