Is it 35 mins long?
That edit is 1 hour and 46 minutes. I just started on an updated version that will probably be a couple of minutes longer.
I read through the overview, it seems unclear what drives the plot. Why are they going from place to place to place to place if not to get to Palpatine?
They are seeking out the hidden fleet which, even in the official release I would argue, is the main threat to the galaxy. It doesn’t address any of the plot holes regarding the fleet itself, such as why they were waiting to deploy even after the people’s fleet showed up; why the ships designed and constructed on this planet are the only ships that can’t navigate off said planet - every ship in the people’s fleet and Pryde’s command ship can come and go no problem; after destroying like 3 star destroyers and the command ship, they leave with Poe saying something like, “They’re stuck here. Let’s go home.” Never mind that there is still an inactive beacon on the ground, and even assuming it was destroyed offscreen, it also assumes the people who built 10,000 star destroyers in 30 years won’t to construct another navigation beacon in like a week. Even if somehow the entire working population was in that arena, you still have 10,000 skeleton crews to draw workers from.