Your ideas sound good, I’m interested. : )
Anyway, I did a rewrite of the crawl to condense and reorganize it a bit.

STAR WARS

Epilogue

ASHES OF THE EMPIRE

A terrorist organization known as the FIRST ORDER has unleashed a massive battleship equipped with the power to destroy entire star systems. Now serving the First Order, the fallen Jedi Kylo Ren has betrayed and murdered his father, Han Solo.

Desperate to stop these growing threats, General Leia Organa has sent her pupil Rey to seek out her missing brother Luke Skywalker. Feeling responsible for his nephew’s fall to the Dark Side and the destruction of his new JEDI ORDER, Luke has went into exile.

The mysterious leader of the First Order, Snoke, has ordered Kylo Ren to hunt down Skywalker. However, Luke’s whereabouts are classified and known only to a handful of resistance leaders. In this age of turmoil, the First Order reigns and no one is safe….