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Post #1399231

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sade1212
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The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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Date created
2-Jan-2021, 7:13 PM

Had a look at the finished version of the Mandalore episode. The intro is really solid, but I wouldn’t mind more of a transition from the episode title to the actual start of the episode. As it is, it feels as if the intro is a commercial and then the show returns from a commercial break, if you get what I mean. The episode starts quite suddenly and doesn’t feel led in to. Perhaps you could try to shoehorn in the shot the others mentioned before while the intro music is still playing, or something.

The editing is as solid as it was every other time I watched it before, and Obi-Wan’s saber doesn’t seem like an issue to me: he clearly shows he’d forgotten about it since he tries to grab it from his waistband, and we can easily infer that Vizsla or one of his men picked it up offscreen. I think the conversation Kalee is referring to is at 18:59 - Satine claims to have saved Obi-Wan’s life even though that’s not really justifiable anymore. The cut in the later portion of the episode from Obi-Wan in the lift to “a civil war killed most of Satine’s people” still feels very sudden even without the lift door noise, because Obi-Wan starts speaking INSTANTLY on the cut, but I guess that’s a limitation of the footage.

Edit:
The outro/credits feels like it comes in a touch soon and not very gracefully. Is there any way you could preserve more of the original credits music build up? TCW always made a big point of building the music all the way up and then suddenly hitting you with the credits, much like the movies, and I think attempting to work off of that (maybe even also irising out to be able to use more of the footage), rather than trying to cut off the build-up with a fade out, could work better. The actual outro sequence is awesome though, and I think the character art even works nicely (concept art Satine looks even more like Cate Blanchett!). One little thing; did you deliberately put the text shadow such that it’s a little far away from touching the text on the top line? I’d be tempted to squish it up so it’s touching as much as the shadow for the names on the bottom line.