I have to say “The Death Watch” is pretty great. I can’t speak for new viewers since I’m very familiar with these particular couple of episodes, but it really grasps the CW spirit and feels like something that could have been if the producers chose to do a number of “special”, longer chapters.

The intro and the transition to the episode work well, as I said earlier.

I can live with the mining base scene feeling somewhat rushed. The one thing that was more headscratching for me was to hear both Obi-Wan and Satine mention him being rescued by the Duchess after they escape from the base. Without the conveyor belt sequence Satine showing up hardly qualifies as a rescue at all. I take that you’re not interested in restoring the entire sequence, though you could just excise this later exchange between Obi-Wan and Satine. This would also fit better with Satine and Obi-Wan not acting very friendly to each other the next morning.

The transition between Mandalore Plot and Voyage of Temptation was seamless, great work on that one. The two episodes work surprisingly well when merged; Anakin arrives at the precise moment to act as the audience surrogate and learn about Obi-Wan’s past with Satine which was left somewhat vague in the original Mandalore Plot episode.

The argument between Satine and Obi-Wan flows nicely. The cuts are indiscernible.

I’d argue the shot of the Coronet in hyperspace coming right after the ship makes the jump feels a bit rough. Maybe you could move up the scene of the Coronet activating hyperspace just before the conversation on Satine’s quarters. On the other hand removing the bit with the mini-spider probes works pretty well, the pacing was on point.

I’m very hyped for what this project has next to offer and I’m glad to contribute! In fact I’m interested in making and sharing Spanish subtitles for the episodes if it’s of any help to you.