Excellent feedback kerperlo, thanks! Detailed feedback like this is extremely useful. I’ll check over all of those. The quick cuts you mention are all part of the original episodes, though.

As for the 13:00-14:00 sequence (which is also the sequence in my clip above), if that doesn’t work for people that’s tricky, because this uses as much as possible without the conveyor belt. I wonder if there’s an alternative ordering which goes like:

Obi-Wan explores the mine and sees the Mando equipment, but doesn’t get attacked
He calls Satine at dinner, without implying he’s in trouble (instead we imply he’s calling her to show her the Mando kit in production)
While she’s on her way, he gets jumped
She arrives just in time to see him finish off the last couple of guys
I could cut around the dialogue which refers to him losing his lightsaber, but Pre Viszla is still going to have it on his belt.