I’d definitely keep the Star Wars TV intro (Mando style), yet you could experiment with other pieces of score accompanying it to blend better with the following new track. Maybe you could use a softer version of Ahsoka’s theme for the text instead of the synthwave one (I really like the first half of this one)? Or just wait a few second more to start the music, after the SW one has faded out.

I agree the main titles would feel more natural with some kind of motion, such as a zoom-in or zoom-out, added to them.

The outro music fits in a phenomenal way. I like how it starts with a melancholic rendition of the clones motif, then transitions into the militaristic Republic march. And the concept art idea works wonderfully.