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Post #1396199

Author
McFibb
Parent topic
The Clone Wars: Refocused [COMPLETE]
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Date created
23-Dec-2020, 9:15 PM

Awesome work! I’ve been refreshing this thread massive amounts the last week or so, and it’s great to see you’ve been up to a lot!

A few things:

(Refresher: I’m a Clone Wars noob, but longtime film cannon fan.)

  1. The hype train was for real watching the new Star Wars intro logo from Mando. Def psychs you up leading into the CW logo.

  2. That said, I agree partially with a previous commentor: the music just doesn’t quite fit over the CW logo and intro text. However, I’d advocate keeping the new SW intro (from Mando) and swap in new title/intro text music. Not sure if it’s tempo, arrangement, tone, etc — but it’s not quite what I anticipated musically coming into the show I’ve been reading from your deeply curated analyses. It’s 100% within reach, and I get what you’re trying to do from previous posts (and I’m all for it!), but the choice for intro/outro isn’t quite there yet. It’s almost too somber/sad, as opposed to contemplative.

  3. Totally agree that intro text is far superior to the narrator, but I’m not a huge fan of the Solo-style text. Not that I’m in favor of going full traditional SW crawl, but I do like that the crawl is forcibly concise, but allows bolding/all-caps for emphasis. I feel in an episodic series like this, that could be really useful creatively. I don’t have a constructive path forward in this point, but I’ll keep thinking on it.

  4. Back to the logo and chapter title: I’d love to see a cold open every episode prior to seeing both of these. Obv influenced by Mando, but I think they use it to great effect and could be super effective here. It’s more work finding the story beats for each episode to knock the cold open out of the park, but it would be icing on the cake if you could make it work!

  5. Lastly, font/font color could possibly be tweaked. I love thin fonts as a general rule, but the blue color made it slightly difficult to read, especially over the end credits. I’d advocate doing a font and font color exploration and see what works. Go wild; we can always pair you back. 😃 Maybe play with diff fonts or sizes for end credit role/name pairings.

I’m gonna watch this like 500 more times because I’m so ridiculously excited to start watching! Thank you! I’ll be sure to aggregate additional feedback as it comes to me.