This sounds like quite the endeavor, I’m very much looking forward to it. I don’t have any input right now other than maybe consider putting in dates as a way of transitioning to things and conveying passage of time and days (I tried this with my own edit I abandoned some time ago). An example would be: “Date 13:5:4” (year/month/day) for the first part of the battle of Christophsis “Cat and Mouse” (May the 4th), then “Date 13:5:5” for “Hidden Enemy”, and so on. The actual month/day is made up as it’s not clear exactly when these events occur within the year (13 post “Great ReSynchronization”, or 22 BBY). Here’s a wookieepedia article on the Great ReSynchronization, which would have been the dating system used during the Clone Wars period:
https://starwars.fandom.com/wiki/Great_ReSynchronization
I used dates to show the passage of time when editing together the Domino Squad Episodes. Not sure if this helps but figured I’d throw it out there.