Thanks Dantearant. I’ll check on that Kylo line volume.
Having rewatched that scene in your edit, I think you could improve it even just by adding a silent beat. The line is during Kylo and Rey’s skype call in Kijimi.
“You remember WHAT You did”. The volume / intensity in Kylo’s voice changes between ‘remember’ and ‘WHAT’. Maybe adding a beat between those words can make it seem like Kylo is building up to say “what you did” in the more intense tone.
Anyway its just an idea! I really love this edit. I compared your version of Rey vs Tie Fighter with the theatrical version, and yours is just so much better at creating and keeping the tension alive. It makes me realise how the setpieces in TROS are actually really great, maybe with more time to cook the movie would have come out more refined.