Just finished watching, and I think the cuts you made were very successful. It worked well to have Werner Herzog’s character talk about the Mandalorians and how “it is a shame your people suffered,” then in the next scene we see the Mandalorians living underground for the first time. It also worked very well to have the space dogfight as an immediate reason for Mando returning to Nevarro.
I thought it was a shame how offhand Kuill’s death ended up in the context of one whole film, a lot of the tension building up to it being cut as well, but whenever shots or dialogue were edited out they were edited out very smoothly, so well done.
It was really nice to revisit the show with season 2 just around the corner.