Is there an alternate source for a similar line? Maybe from the radio drama?
I have to wait until I can sit and think a minute but I think I like your proposed restructure of those scenes!
I’m glad you like the idea. I do think shifting that sequence around helps the pacing considerably. For the C-3P0 bit, I’ll see if I can find another line, but his saying “Chewbacca” from ROTJ was the first that came to mind.
Also, who has a good pre-hyperspace jump sound for the ice wall moment? I haven’t found the right one yet.
The sound effect that I think works really well is this one, when Artoo fixes the hyperdrive in ESB. I’ll try to see if I can pull the sound without the music, maybe out of the surround sound mix.