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Post #1375487

Author
rajdmc
Parent topic
The Matrix: Édition Noir et Néon (WIP)
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Date created
16-Sep-2020, 10:51 AM

Hey RoccondilRinon

So I was thinking if you’re trying to match dialogue duration to existing footage, the altered text you’ve drafted may be a bit wordy…and perhaps contains too much exposition. Taking the simplicity of the original text, and the new context of your altered draft, would something like this work:

The human brain is more powerful than any computer ever built by man or Machine. Unable to replicate the complex network of a billion firing neurons, the Machines, in time, found a way to harness the near limitless processing power of our conscious minds…

What is the Matrix? Control. The Matrix is a computer-generated dream-world, built to keep our sleeping consciousness under control, in order to change a human being… [holds up a pocket calculator] …into this.

Does this cover what you’re trying to convey?