As before i´ll mention technical aspects of your edit, since content wise it is and should be your own thing.

Your additions and corrections for episode I are working so far.

Episode II - Corruption of Mandalore

Crawl --> maybe without the exclamation mark. SW never used this kind of thing, but if you want to keep it, just do so
Transitions:
–> 0:22:49 - too abrupt
–> 1:04:30 - perhaps use an audio fade out/fade in to the next scene
–> 1:46:25 - hard abrupt cut
–> 1:48:12, 1:48:12 - same here
–> 1:49:18 - use a audio fade out or fade in
–> 1:50:47, 1:53:44, 1:57:14, 1:57:54 - same here