I read over the crawls again and found two tittle things, I think are unnecessary:
Path of Padawan
„been causing many problems for the Jedi Order…“ - try it without „many“, doesn’t feel sw like.
Fate of the Republic
„The REPUBLIC is completely unaware…“ - same here, don’t use „completely“.
Both are an emphasis, that isn’t needed. It doesn’t add more tragic to the context. Simpler is better.
I appreciate your project, it’s a hell of work.