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Okay, after reading your feedback, here’s some rewritten crawls that you might like better. I think I’m going to leave “REPUBLIC” and “SEPARATISTS” capitalized because they’re our main sides in the conflict. Most political organizations will also remain capitalized.

I have completely rewritten the crawl for AN UNTAMED EVIL because it just wasn’t flowing well for me before. I have left the mention of Maul because I want to cover his backstory there since we haven’t physically seen him since Episode I. But CMMAP, we have also previously seen Maul in Talzin’s crystal ball in Episode III of this series (actual series episode is “Witches of the Mist”).


The Clone Wars continue to rage across the galaxy. In an attempt to weaken the REPUBLIC, the SEPARATISTS have reopened droid factories on Geonosis and unleashed a massive starship known as the Malevolence.

Jedi Knights Obi-Wan Kenobi and his former apprentice Anakin Skywalker have been dispatched to the besieged world of Christophsis. Due to Separatist interference, they have lost all contact with the Republic.

The two Jedi Knights now travel to a nearby Seperatist base, where a hidden enemy awaits them. This dark warrior is Asajj Ventress, Count Dooku’s new assassin who has been causing trouble for the Jedi Order…


The SEPARATISTS are in retreat! The REPUBLIC has destroyed the Malevolence and disabled the Separatist droid factories on Geonosis. But now a new threat has emerged.

A large group of planets that want to stay out of the war have formed the Council of Neutral Systems. But rumors suggest that the Council’s leader, Duchess Satine Kryze of Mandalore, may be building an army to fight for the Separatist cause.

Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi, an old friend of Duchess Satine, has been sent to Mandalore to discover the truth behind these claims…


Recent peace negotiations between the REPUBLIC and the SEPARATISTS have failed, and the war has resumed in full force.

Asajj Ventress, Count Dooku’s young apprentice, has received intense training from her master and grown incredibly strong in the Dark Side of the Force. Ventress now leads a vicious attack on Republic forces in the Sullust system.

However, Darth Sidious has sensed her growing power. Fearing that Dooku is planning to betray him, Sidious has forged an evil scheme to remove Ventress from the war…


The Nightsisters of the planet Dathomir have been pushed to the brink of extinction by the forces of Count Dooku. Asajj Ventress managed to escape the massacre and has began a new life as a bounty hunter.

After escaping from the cruelty of his Sith masters, Savage Opress returned to Dathomir. Mother Talzin, the leader of the Nightsisters, then sent Savage on a quest to find his long-lost brother, MAUL.

Maul was once a Sith Lord, but was seemingly killed by Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi over ten years ago. In order to help him locate Maul, Talzin gave Savage an enchanted pendant, which has now led him to a junkyard planet known as Lotho Minor…


A mysterious transmission has been intercepted far beyond the Outer Rim, deep in the Chrelythiumn system. Buried in this strange message is a Jedi distress code that has not been used in over two millennia.

Anakin Skywalker and his apprentice Ahsoka Tano, traveling to the planet Cato Neimoidia to fight Separatist forces, have diverged from their plans and instead resolved to investigate this strange message.

Obi-Wan Kenobi, having returned from the crisis on Mandalore, has met up with Anakin and Ahsoka to aid them. Fearing a Separatist trap, they are planning to meet with a heavily armed Jedi cruiser…


Ahsoka Tano has left the Jedi Order after being framed for a heinous bombing. Traveling through the underworld of Coruscant, Ahsoka has encountered Mandalorian warrior Bo-Katan Kryze, who has requested her help.

After escaping from the clutches of his old master Darth Sidious, the former Sith Lord Maul has once again taken control of Mandalore with the help of his rebuilt criminal empire. The REPUBLIC is unaware of this growing threat.

Elsewhere, Anakin Skywalker leads a valiant assault on a massive space station besieged by the SEPARATISTS. Aided by fellow Jedi Knights and his loyal clone troopers Rex and Fives, Skywalker hopes to win another victory for the Republic…