“At last the work of generations is complete, the day of victory is at hand, the day of the sith.
Send the fleet to the galaxy…let it burn.
The Final order begins”
“Yes my lord”
I would say this might be best. (Might have to skip the “Fortnight” message part altogether.) But, the Pryde Palpatine scene would either become very short, or lost, though. I do like spelling out that the First Order is going there to man the ship, and that scene is the only real way in any version of the film to soundly imply that.