I wasn’t happy with the opening crawl, so I’ve been playing around with it. I’ve settled on this. Any comments?
Following the Battle of Endor the NEW REPUBLIC has restored peace to the core systems, but a power vacuum has plunged the outer rim into chaos.
IMPERIAL REMNANTS have formed in the shadows. They have taken control of distant worlds as they search for a mysterious asset that could return them to power.
Commissioned by the Bounty Hunter Guild and given only the asset’s age and the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches its last known location…
I’d adjust the opening paragraph to focus on the Imperial Remnant. You don’t want to focus on the New Republic since they’re absent from the story.
Following the death of EMPEROR PALPATINE at the Battle of Endor, the IMPERIAL REMNANT has splintered with various war lords casting shadows over systems throughout the galaxy.
Despite their victory, the newly formed GALACTIC REPUBLIC doesn’t have the strength or numbers to bring peace to the entire galaxy. Many have turned to BOUNTY HUNTERS to enforce justice.
Commissioned by THE GUILD, bounty hunters are given an age and tracking beacons to the chain codes of targets. With the promise of a vast reward, a lone MANDALORIAN approaches the last known location of his prey…