If there were a ‘Forceback’ type scene somewhere I could see some of those lines fitting in. Given that I’d already scaled back the Palpatine voice from Mustafar (and removed introduction of him from the crawl), I don’t think adding more of him there would be helpful. I just don’t see a place for it anywhere, and the dialogue sounds pretty vapid in the first place. Like he’s not saying anything, like it was from a Taco Bell commercial or something rather than a speech about what he’s going to do or an announcement of his plans.