THIS PROJECT HAS BEEN DISCONTINUED. AFTER BEING DISAPPOINTED BY SEASON 2 I FEEL NO NEED TO BOTHER WITH THIS. I DELETED ALL MY WORK SO I CANNOT BE TEMPTED TO RESUME THIS EFFORT.

Overall goals of this project

-Reduce abrupt shifts in tone, like suddenly they wanted Hanna to be Scott Pilgrim
-Make Erik more serious
-Make Agent Wiegler more of a villain early on and a less likable character
-Reduce the odd mouth movements and less than stellar acting of Agent Wiegler
-Trim ponderous filler moments for better pacing
-Remove any low-budget and awkward looking shots
-Use more female artists in the musical score (Lissie, Warpaint, etc.)
-Incorporate some hardcore Industrial music, where appropriate (Combichrist, Killing Joke, etc.)

Change list

Episode 1

Brightened opening scene of Erik sitting in a chair.
Added a little camera movement as Erik approaches the security gate.
Muted Erik’s expository line in the lab telling the baby he’s taking her to her mother.
When Erik punches the guard into the fire, the man is not knocked unconscious and instead continues screaming while burning to death.
Added some extra sizzling and popping sounds after the guard falls fully into the fire.
Escaping the lab, trimmed Erik slowly getting into the getaway car with Hanna’s mother.
In the forest near the lab, replaced the pavement peel out sound with a dirt/gravel sound as Erik speeds away.
Cut Agent Wiegler’s final delayed pistol shot as the car escapes the hotel.
In the escaping car, cut the mother’s exposition to the baby saying, “Mommy and Daddy are taking you away.”
In the escaping car, added camera shake, notably to the still shots of the baby.
As the car stops at the edge of the clearing, the music track ends a little earlier.
Replaced the pavement peel out sound with a dirt/gravel sound as Erik floors it to try and reach the other side of the clearing.
Added more booming car ambience as it rattles along across the clearing.
Added the music, “Love is to Die” by Warpaint during the practice fight between Hanna and Erik.
Trimmed Agent Wiegler making a prolonged weird face as she sits on a park bench.
Trimmed Hanna and Erik awkwardly moving to hide behind a tree.
Changed the closing music to the song “Daughters” by Lissie. Re-foleyed the helicopter sound fx.
Extended length of credits for the full song to play.

Episode 2

Trimmed Agent Wiegler’s prolonged staring after the agent asks her if she heard Hanna asking for her.
Cut fake Agent Wiegler’s first round of questioning Hanna. This actor’s vocal delivery was bad, and this also eliminates the real Agent Wiegler giving her instructions through the earpiece. Hanna would have heard this.
Trimmed fake Agent Wiegler’s reaction (insta-dead) when her throat is slashed.
Cut Agent Wiegler trying to be nice to her French boyfriend’s annoying kid. Now she comes home and somewhat ignores her boyfriend.
Trimmed the prolonged shot of Agent Wiegler’s face after she examines the document in her bedroom.
Trimmed Hanna and Sophie, her new bestie, walking in the desert just before the car approaches.
In the strip club, cut the conversation about Agent Wiegler’s coffee habits, such a boring backstory.
In the strip club, rearranged sequence to trim some of Agent Wiegler’s painful to watch facial expressions.
In the strip club, cut Jacobs’ ending line subtly agreeing to help. He instead just smiles when Agent Wiegler says she can’t use official channels to hunt down Hanna.
Trimmed the final moments of the strip club.
On the ferry, cut the mother’s lines to Sophie, her daughter, about going to discos.
Cut closeup and long shot of Hanna peering over her sunglasses in an exaggerated manner to show us she knows she’s being followed. Now very subtly it shows maybe she knows.
Cut Jacobs watching surveillance footage of what he just personally witnessed in the Ferry parking just to give expository of why he’s not grabbing Hanna yet.
Moved the scene of Erik buying supplies earlier so the plotlines feel more intertwined.
Used suspenseful music when Hanna mails a postcard, and this scene now transitions into Erik’s elderly mother in the kitchen, also using the new music.
Cut shots of Agent Wiegler’s friendly, smiling face when greeting Erik’s mother at her front door. Rearranged and trimmed the scene.
Trimmed amount of time Jacobs and his henchman are just standing in the hotel room before they search Hanna’s backpack.
During the club makeout session, changed the club music to “Jupiter 4” by Sharon Van Etten.
Changed the ending music to “Seventeen” by Sharon Van Etten and moved the start of the music earlier to when Hanna is about to shoot one of the assailants in the train station.
Extended length of credits for the full song to play.

Episode 3

Cut Hanna’s line “what is more important than me?” On the street, now she just asks her father where he was.
In the car, cut the dialogue with the driver about Hanna being educated and Erik smiling about it.
Stopped at the hideout gate, Erik does not smile.
Cut Erik running into the hideout like a schoolboy, and he and Elsa overly fawning over each other.
In the hideout, cut the bromance about Erik looking good.
In the hideout, cut the lighthearted joking about Lukas not returning money.
Cut Erik smiling as he asks Hanna if she wants to freeze to death.
Cut the bro banter as Erik and his buddies walk upstairs.
Moved dialogue so when Erik asks Hanna what she knows about hotels, he is no longer smirking.
Trimmed dialogue and footage so Erik no longer smirks when he tells Hanna to stay in the van.
Added some more camera movement when Erik and the gang infiltrate the weapons depot.
Sped up the van when Hanna comes to the rescue.
Erik doesn’t smile and laugh when Hanna drives them away in the van and makes the police car crash.
As Agent Wiegler is being driven to her hotel, trimmed the part where her little colleague turns and stares at her.
Significantly trimmed parts of Agent Wiegler’s arrival and conversation at the bar with Jacobs. The fluff is gone, and they’re more serious. She now becomes annoyed and leaves him talking to himself in drunk midsentence.
Trimmed Agent Wiegler’s walk into the hotel. She doesn’t get a premonition while outside.
Cut Agent Wiegler’s phony smile at the hotel clerk after she spots surveillance in the lobby.
Cut away from Agent Wiegler in the hotel room with Jacobs before she starts pouting her lips with emotions.
Erik doesn’t wake Dieter up by throwing pebbles at his window. Presumably Erik used a phone like an adult.
Removed Erik as an awkward spectator during the soccer game with Hanna and the gang. He doesn’t drive up during the fun.
Changed the music during the soccer game to “Harder, Better, Faster, Stronger” by Daft Punk to give it some more lightheartedness, instead of once again hearing Hanna’s somber theme.
As Erik watches Hanna practicing soccer later added the music: Sadness by Sascha Ende, Link: https://filmmusic.io/song/144-sadness, License: http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by/4.0/
Cut Agent Wiegler writing Johanna’s name on the board. Bad overacting.
Cropped Agent Wiegler (or her face) out of the frame during much of Lukas’ interrogation.
When Erik gets a call with Hanna it vibrates instead of ringing like an old school phone. He’s tactical (and other characters had this exact same ring = lazy foley).
Cut Agent Wiegler’s voiceover saying “mmm-hmmmm” to her colleague talking about not shooting on German soil.
Cut some of the unnecessary swerving in the parking garage.
Cut the German banter after Erik’s friends park in in the parking garage.
Cut Erik’s guy walking in the garage, now he’s just running.
Cut the weird face Lukas makes when Erik accuses him of being nervous. Now he just takes a drink.
Sped up the car as it hits Jacobs, and restructured the sequence so it is a surprise.
Replaced closing credits music with “This Shit Will Fuck You Up” by Combichrist. Removed some of the lyrics not supporting the themes of this film.

More to come as the edit progresses…