There are a few other Battlefront cinematics with shots that could also work.
https://youtu.be/yz15PFcbmN0?t=21 - A shaky stormtrooper close-up. Doesn’t tell us much, but it might help make the rest of the scene’s hectic pace seem more intentional.
https://youtu.be/mlCH4uBBOzE?t=19 - An alternate shot of a First Order transport landing for battle. This one isn’t as fast-paced, but it might fit better with the rest of the scene visually since it doesn’t show the sky.
Nice find! That second video has some great shots. Not sure the first one is useable though. I looked everywhere for a shot of the back of Kylo’s head.