Looking over your cutlist and watching your samples, I think this is one of the cleanest looking trilogy edits I’ve seen proposed. It’s focused and not overly ambitious.
I really like that you moved the arrival at Ahch-To to the beginning of TLJ. From the first time I watched TFA, I thought the hyperspace jump was the natural place to end the movie. I feel the rest of it was tacked on to shoehorn Mark Hamill in for marketing. If I ever do a full trilogy edit, this would be a must for me.
The only edit I’m not too sure about is the delay of Chewie’s reveal in TRoS. I feel like a fair amount has happened in the movie by that point, so why are Hux and Pryde only getting to Chewie now?
I also agree that Hal’s structural changes would be ideal. It doesn’t change the story, it just helps it flow better while reducing the feel of copying ANH.