Hal 9000 said:

If I had to decide one way or the other permanently right now, I still lean toward leaving the structure of the opening as it is. However, I remain open to being persuaded and shown that it can work.

I won’t dub and sub Boolio unless there’s something to gain. Anybody think of some thing he could say to imply that the final order consists of old imperial star destroyers, that wouldn’t be too heavy handed or weird?

Also, one of you posted a good while ago a good edit point to remove the lightspeed skipping reference once the falcon returns. Who was that? It seemed good but I can’t remember how it went.

Darth Muffy said:

Possible Changes/Addition Ideas:

Mustafar

00:03:10 - Palpatines “find me” line to Kylo
Sounds a bit clean possibly give his voice some dream like fx, maybe adding an echoing effect ?

Beginning Chase

Remove Klaud scenes
As already been mentioned by others

Make Boolio speak Alien & adding subtitles
Although Mark Hamill voiced him the scene would feel alot better to have the charactor subed.

Resistance Base

Remove light speed skip talk from 00:13:41 to 00:13:51

Passana

Remove “they fly now!”
As already been mentioned by others

Remove Kylos exploding tie centre piece after crash @ 00:38:44

00:39:31 - Rey & Kylo Force Pulling Ship
I find it really odd how close they both are to each other yet Kylo instead of just walker over to Rey just stands there using the force then watches as they run off. Removing 00:39:31 to 00:39:33 and slight cropping of Ren @ 00:37:47 & 00:39:55 we are left thinking theres some distance between Rey & Ren.

Kijimi

00:45:39 Zorii telling Poe “I want to see your brains in the snow”
Doesn’t sound like what a StarWars character would say. dropping that line leaving her slight nod to Poe holding a gun to his head would be a much better effect.

Exegol

01:50:04 - Dyad Exposition Talk
Having Palpatine explaining more exposition at this point does cheapen the scene more so if it was possible to just have him simply realising theres a mysterious force between Rey & Ren without touting the dyad exposition it would add more by saying less. Also maybe remove talk elsewhere about force Dyad.

01:57:12 - Have the force ghosts disappear AFTER Palpatine explodes @ 01:57:17

Theres one other final big change which I feel would make a big difference involving Leia & the sabre battle with Rey & Ben but I’ll try and show it rather then explain it here via a mock up I’ll do to better explain.
Also cutting Chewies original alive reveal does kind of speed up on screen an already fast pasted film.

That was me Hal also heres that change involving Leia & the sabre battle with Rey & Ben.
Please bear in mind its only a crude proof of concept vid I’m running a lowly HTPC and using Win10 default Video app to cut and paste this together but I hope you get the idea.

Rens Redemption:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1NQmlOR2p-7ad6a4NBYTSjxmJ7xlnK6-j/view?usp=sharing