What, like he was gonna say, “OMG we’re gonna die in sand, omg real quick, Rey, I’M GAY! hhurvvvldlejerjj” dies ?
Seems disjointed and extremely on the nose. I wouldn’t have cared if they took Finn and Poe in that direction but it’s hard to imagine a fan edit pulling it off without feeling fan-fic-y.
It’s simpler than you’d think. Most of their scenes together lean that way anyway, add their deleted scene in TLJ, cut down Zorri and Finn’s romance with Rey, and then change that ending scene.
I did cut the need to tell something, just because it’s never established what he needed to say. I kept the bickering before Hux rescues them, but I have Poe ask “Good luck, huh?” Before Finn says “You still on about that?”. A lot of the cuts are minor and simple, and because it’s not too on the nose prior to this end scene it works for the most part. I’m still tweaking the end scene to make it work, but it’s better to me than the alternatives that are underdeveloped or go headfirst into empty pools.