Personally, I think keeping “the final word in the story of rebellion” line feels a bit unfitting when the ghosts are now the main selling point of the scene. It’s like Palps is ignoring the ghosts on purpose. Jonh’s original version, where that line is cut, and Palpatine quickly goes for the lightning, makes Palpatine look as he’s genuinely reacting to the sight of all the Jedi and counterattacking out of shock/panic.
I’d like it better if he said “…in the story of the Jedi” instead.
exact! fear!
If that’s the case, Palps’ eyes could be more open to show his actual surprise/fear.
Also a suggestion to you John: fliping the shots of Luke and Anakin when you show their faces for the first time could be a nice idea, in filmmaking, we tend to show things in the most harmic way, as the order of the ghost from left to right is: Yoda, Obi-Wan, Luke and Anakin, is more harmonic to show then in this order instead of Yoda, Obi-Wan, Anakin and Luke. What do you think?
Another suggestion: maybe remove the shot were the ghosts vanishes, its a bit static and we can imply they disappear after Palpatine dies as they don’t show up again.
Otherwise, I’m really impressed of what you guys are pulling of this movie. I feel so much love and passion here. Really looking foward to see how it will evolve.