What do you think of changing the line “hunt for the scavenger” to “hunt for the Wayfinder”, or maybe cut at “prepare to crush any worlds that defy us”? I think it just follows better continuity wise.
If you’re going to have Kylo say that his knights will come along in the hunt it would be cool to have them standing behind Kylo in that wide shot after the massacre. Maybe the shot of them from the force-vision in TFA could be used?