That translates really well!
I think the line “as all the Sith live in ME” should be pulled back just a tad so that the word “Me” syncs to when his mouth opens.
Oh yeah, I meant to look at the lips. Moving some of that dialogue back to Rey’s scene shortens the swooping camera around to Palpatine so there’s plenty of room to play with in the timing. I’m not going to render another clip, but it should be easy if anyone wants to use the idea.