These are really great! I wasn’t sure about this idea at all, but seeing it, it really works! I don’t even really think you need another voice. Other than making what you already have a little clearer, I wouldn’t suggest anything else at all!

Preferences:

Pasaana:

“Solo’s Wookiee” (implies they have fairly good tabs on our resistance heroes and Ben’s wider life)
“I get his teeth” (or, “I get his hide”)

Kijimi:

“The girl. I feel her presence. Find her.” (“The girl” seems to be how the bad guys refer to Rey, as Kylo did in TFA when he was on the hunt for her. Find her keeps the intention ambiguous, so editors won’t need to work around this as they would with ‘Palpatine wants…’, etc)

Exegol Entrance:
I’d advise only using two - three feels a bit too full.

“Still chasing the girl, Ben?” (emphasises his turn, his feelings for Rey, and uses his old name, which they must surely consider an insult)
“Traitorous scum. To think we followed you.” (Best reference back to “master of the Knights of Ren”, makes it personal)

Exegol Pause:

“You’ll join your father soon” (‘Join’ better than ‘see’ because they might not believe in ghosts, but this one’s strongest as it twists the knife, and reminds us we’ve lost Han)

Exegol Saber:

“What?! How?!” (We recognise it as Luke’s so we don’t need the reminder, nor do we need them to account for ‘fairness’ - this plot element and new power should be a suprise, so their language here should just reflect that)