I feel like this has a lot of potential but so far the only exchange that really adds something is their reveal on Exegol. Subsequent shots could build off of it with more meaningful lines. I’d replace the line about being unfair with some expression of surprise. “What a disappointment” is in a shot so short it might as well be dropped rather than replaced. I really like the initial exchange though. It really clarifies what they’re thinking at this moment.

As for the other scenes, the dialog doesn’t add anything to their characters. It just states what we already know. Also, I’d shorten “Luke’s scavenger girl” to just “the scavenger”.

FWIW, Duel of the Fates names some of them as Hattaska Ren, Ott Ren, Lorl Ren, and Jaedec Ren. That last one described as being the rogue, a title usually given to Vicrul, or as I call him Mangoface - I think the name Jaedec suits him really well.

Supposedly there was at one point a knight named Sollony Ren, but she wasn’t in the leaked script. I suspect she was renamed to be less similar to Solana, Rey’s last name revealed at the end.

Oh and I’ve always thought it’d be neat to have one named Ignatia Ren, but that’s just a name I made up.