Pasaana intial reveal and pan:
Palpatine echoing: My servants… (take any line of him saying “My servant” and then copy the initial “S” from servant and paste it at the end. I can make this if you have the isolated dialogue stems)
Then insert one of the cut lines from Palpatine to Kylo about getting Rey for him, like “Bring me the girl” or something. This can set up the idea that they are more loyal to Palpatine than to Ren.
Pasaana Chewie Scene (two KoR watch Chewie in the desert):
Knight A: A friend of Luke’s.
Knight B: I get his teeth.
I think this is great, but I think the other suggestion of adding a third line about his fur is too much.
Kijimi Alley Scene (the KoR pause in an alley just after Rey and the gang passed nearby):
Knight A: Luke’s scavenger girl. She’s close. Spread out.
“Start killing all the women.” Is too cartoonishly evil, and “Just like the temple” is a bit too hamfisted. I agree that there should be little bits to remind us of them being Luke’s students, but I don’t think those lines work here.
Exegol Ben Fight Scene (the KoR confront a weaponless Ben):
As they initially circle him:
Knight A: Well, well, well. (OR) Look who’s here.
Knight B: Still chasing that girl?
Knight C: And to think we once called you “Master”. (OR) Palpatine was right. You’re weak.
After “She will take her revenge”:
Knight A: What a disappointment.
When they see Ben’s saber:
Knight A: (mutters breathily) That’s not fair
I’m gonna mock these up to see if they fit in the actual scenes, then I’ll put a link here.