Are we still determined to keep the “silenced all communication” thing from Trevorrow’s script? I feel like it doesn’t have much relevance here, and it’s contradicted by Lando’s message reaching the entire galaxy.
It fits because that’s why Lando has to fly out and rally the troops himself. No long range communications. I would also be fine with Hal removing it and adding something about Leia because it would also be a shame to remove her from the crawl.
EDIT: Here, I inserted a different middle part:
The galaxy is united. After the heroic sacrifice of Luke Skywalker, countless systems have taken a stand in the name of RESISTANCE.
General Leia Organa, sensing a sinister presence, dispatched many spies deep into the UNKNOWN REGIONS. But none were ever heard from again.
Meanwhile, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren is haunted by visions. Determined to destroy any threat to his rule, he seeks a powerful artifact hidden on the planet MUSTAFAR. . . .