Here is a rough markup of my restructure idea, audio and video needs work but I don’t think this is anything that the amazing team of editors here cannot accomplish. I do think the first shot of the Falcon flying by can be cleaned up a lot (looking at you @poppasketti haha). But overall, I feel like this structure allows for a better crawl on the state of the galaxy, not as fast of pacing at the start, and allows for the Mustafar scene to stay in. I wouldn’t also mind switching up Rey’s vision to eliminate Kylo, but that allows him to communicate with the Vader mask before the Mustafar and Palpatine scenes. Let me know your thoughts on this!
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It’s definitely an interesting structure. I like how it does offer a possible solution to our Mustafar problems and I think eliminating Kylo from the vision sequence would work simply because Dom’s vision sequence makes use of that footage anyways. One thing that I did notice is how would Boolio give the Resistance information about Palpatine, if Kylo hasn’t meet with him yet?
Edit: Also, really love the crawl, nice work