In my edit I’m moving the scene of Anakin visiting Padme to just after “Once more, the Sith shall rule the Galaxy!”, in an attempt to give the viewer a bit more context into where Anakin’s head is at just before the Jedi Temple Massacre. Here’s my proof of concept/test/first version/what I slapped together over lunch.

To this end, I’ve removed any reference to Anakin being just about to leave for Mustafar, or the temple being on fire. He still lies to her about the Jedi betraying the Republic, but in my edit this is just he and Palpatine’s ‘cover story’ rather than anything he legitimately believes. I’ve put the lines about Anakin having found a way to save Padme in here, to remind the viewer that he truly believes that if he goes through with this betrayal of the Jedi, he will be able to save Padme. (I also cut Palpatine’s earlier admission that ‘only one has discovered the secret’ to avoid undermining Anakin’s deal with the devil.)

The audio is still a bit rough - the change in tone and volume from “I won’t lose you Padme” to “Wait for me until I return” is too abrupt - but I’ll tidy it up when I’ve decided I’m happy with the dialogue. Please let me know if you have any criticisms or suggestions.