The only thing I would change though is the implication that Han’s just a memory, I personally didn’t like how he just forgives himself and suddenly he’s good again.
He’s interacting with the memory though…the idea is that Leia is basically making him re-live it because he felt so torn in TFA. He claims Han’s death set him free but you can tell he still has remorse. And he couldn’t pull the trigger on Leia in TLJ either. There’s still good in him apparently. Personally, I’m more a fan of irredeemable Kylo in the DOTF script, but TROS is what we got, so we need to make it work. If Kylo were to be redeemed, what’s the best and most feasible way to do it…? I just think it’s more impactful that Leia’s sacrifice had a bigger hand in his turn. Not just, ‘Well, Rey healed me and now my mom is dead. Oh, and there’s dad’. When I saw that in the theater for the first time, it didn’t land with me at all. Is his redemption earned regardless of how we edit this? That’s debatable. But Leia being the instrument here in making him re-face his hardest decision seems to have the most impact. And it gives more justification for why Rey would heal him. She senses it. Otherwise, why would she heal the guy that was going to kill her just seconds earlier…? It’s because she still feels he can come back to the light and is giving him that chance. Leia was trying to show Kylo that, as well…that it’s never too late to reject the dark path.
Anyway, that’s my two cents…just a visual suggestion, but Hal is free to go in the direction he feels is best. It’s primarily his flick after all as the editor/director. 😃