Okay that was an interesting watch. I’ll start with what might need some adjustments:

The crawl needs some work, it’s too long with too much exposition, keep it short but to the point. I didn’t get the deal with Rey magically appearing on Exogol, was it a vison? teleportation? Also you cut Chewie’s death yet it was still referred to throughout, perhaps referring to him being captured would be a better option.

Otherwise there are some very good ideas in this edit. I really like that you completely got rid of the Passana speeder chase, making it look like they ran into a cave. I just think that implication needs to be made clearer. My favourite thing about this is how you switched Rey’s emotional reaction to Chewie’s death to her reacting to Kylo Ren crashing the Tie Fighter, pity you killed him off on the Deathstar because otherwise it was a nice Reylo setup. I also liked that you cut Rey riding the waves on Kef-Bir, adding a sense of mystery as to where she disappeared.

Some very novel ideas here, just needs a little tuning up 😉