I gave that a shot, as well as maybe removing “Please”
I was always iffy on the JAT line myself, but it didn’t seem to matter to untrained ears which is how it made it this far. And so many choices I’ve made since have worked off of that line in particular working.
I didn’t notice last time that you VFX’d Obi-Wan so his saber ignites second; it’s nice and subtly done.
This is a really fantastic change. The only thing I would prefer would be swapping the order of “Don’t you turn against me” and “Your anger and your lust for power have already done that.” the pause between Anakin’s accusation that Obi-wan turned Padme against him and the following line feels a little clunky. It may work better if the second line is an interjection following Obi-wan’s response.