When Yoda says “War” it sounds a bit overtly sentence-mixy. Not sure if there’s another take you could use.
I think the JAT line “Face up to what you’ve done” sticks out. Maybe you could pitch it down a bit or something?
Post #1343926
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- Octorox
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- Revenge of the Sith (The New Canon Cut) [ON HOLD INDEFINITELY]
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- 11-May-2020, 12:26 PM