Completely disagree. There’s a difference between the goal and its methods. What I’m establishing is 100% in line with his words and actions in TLJ. He wants to end it all (or “let it all die”), but they way he’s doing it is crushing the Resistance. If he wants to end the cycle of war, that’s noble, but obviously if the way he’s going to do it is with a planet killing fleet (which is what I set up in this crawl), that’s not exactly altruistic in any way.
But the way you’re phrasing it in the crawl seems to be intentionally tipping the scales. Again, even if we differ philosophically on where he is at the beginning of Rise of Skywalker (and I don’t think we differ that much) the main objection to it that I have is that it’s shortcutting his arc - you’re foreshadowing his turn to the light IN the crawl by making his goals appear nobler than they are through the wording. Yes, there’s a difference between the goal and the methods, I don’t disagree. What I’m saying is that you’re basically prepping audiences to be on the lookout for that change before it’s even really hinted at IN the narrative of the film proper.
Put another way: Yes, as a dictator, he’s looking to end the cycle of war (in his favor, of course), but by phrasing it that way IN the crawl, you’re removing the some of the ambiguity in his mission to end that cycle from the beginning of the film, and it makes his decision to end that cycle of war from a completely different approach at the Death Star ruins later a little flatter, dramatically. I just don’t think you want to tip your hand as to Kylo’s ultimate change-of-heart and redemption IN the crawl. As a dramatic gesture, it’s detracting from his arc, not clarifying it.