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Post #1340954

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Octorox
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Dom's (Possibly) Useful TROS Edit (WIP)
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Date created
4-May-2020, 11:40 PM

DominicCobb said:

They were nobody:
https://vimeo.com/414948227

Really promising, although I think the conversation feels a little disjointed now. Kylo goes from talking about Rey’s power to talking about her parents without much build up. I wonder if it would possible to preserve a little more of the original scene while still excising the problematic elements? Is there a way you could work in Poppasketti’s “you were right. They were nobody” line without the “because they chose to be”? I also wonder if the cutaway to the rest of the gang could be moved, as I think it interrupts the flow of the scene, especially since you’ve made it quite a bit shorter.